Shinigami KOS-MOS
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im probably going to bounce back and forth between two avas hope you dont mind
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Post by Shinigami KOS-MOS on Mar 22, 2007 11:33:18 GMT -5
Stars surrounding us deep into its heart, formed of gases filled with hopes and dreams
Burning away its life, undetermined until it explodes giving new life in its place
we think we can take it all but little do we know those stars we are one as well
Deep in the heavens, glowing like a candle. Burning brightly until it faded, fades into nothing.
tell me what you guys think ^_^ id appreciate it
and if you could help me come up wit ha title that would be great too ^_^
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Post by darkenedstar on Mar 31, 2007 20:10:48 GMT -5
"stars" would be an okay title. Usually, I try and stick to one word titles but that's just me.
I like the way it ends. In the end everyone dies, no matter what. Can't wait to read more of your writings.
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Shinigami KOS-MOS
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im probably going to bounce back and forth between two avas hope you dont mind
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Post by Shinigami KOS-MOS on Apr 2, 2007 14:30:33 GMT -5
thnx so much n_n
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Post by deodaclan18 on Apr 5, 2007 14:43:21 GMT -5
got a little confusing at parts, but it was a good poem. Nice job.
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Shinigami KOS-MOS
Community Member
im probably going to bounce back and forth between two avas hope you dont mind
Posts: 81
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Post by Shinigami KOS-MOS on Apr 9, 2007 15:30:29 GMT -5
sry about that.. i canme up with it in like 5 minutes..
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Post by Major Havok on Sept 9, 2007 15:55:25 GMT -5
[glow=blue,2,300]Yea i agree, it's a tad bit confusing at some points.. But that seems to be your style. Rather vague... It is very good though, keep it up![/glow]
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